Rough Edit and Feedback

After assembling our rushes and forming a very rough edit based upon the storyboards I remained confident that the ideas we had in mind were clearly stated within the film, however; as Debbie stated in our initial edit feedback, it doesn't.

See for yourself (EDIT, there was a video clip of our rough edit here, but blogger didn't like it.)

It doesn't gel well together at all and frankly tires me out just watching it.

We also found that some of the shots needed to exude the bleak feeling less subtlely, perhaps changes to colour in our fine edit will remedy this.